Thursday, October 18, 2012

Abuser/Ravager




Gazing out my window
Didn't know 
And then it hit me out cold
It was you ,ravager                 

Reminiscing your pretense on bike  ,
Conjuring up memories of your physique 
Then ascertaining it with dark figure of man
Only to find it true              

(Memories)
My breathing stopped  , hopes lost
Pain racing up my veins 
My unheard voice begging him to stop
Too fazed by shock and fear 
Couldn't figure out  a way to save me 
A very close shave with death
Thus Falling off  
The last straw was me on floor covered with tears , lies , injuries 
Darkness encompassing all of them
                                
Gazing out my window     
Didn't know 
And then it hit me out cold
It was you ,ravager 

Back to now , 
My hands trembled and lip quivered 
And work before me seemed an eternity away
Tried to lay back and went to sleep for reparation

Next thing I know is Dad waking me up
Telling me it's time back for chores
Blinking and shielding my eyes away from light
Couldn't  pinpoint the discrepancy between nightmare and reality

(Memories)
For the abuser held me so strongly in his roots
Bruises encased  my arm and face
For on that night ,it dawned on my soul

I had lost the battle 
Lost the world I created
Lost my integrity and true self
All at hands of egotist


Gazing out my window
Didn't know 
And then it hit me out cold
It was you ,ravager

24 comments:

  1. this is quite intense. it full of imagery as well. i hope this isn't based on actual events...

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  2. Ao Bibliohile I totaly agree very intense, and after reading comments on fb, im very sorry to hear it was based on true events.But you seem really good with words and hopefully puttings down in amazing poems like this will help a great deal. xx

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    1. Thanks and its better now than yday when it all happened and I am honored to get such compliments from you !!

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  3. its beautiful and so so well explained!!! and emotional too!! I am sorry sweetheart you had to go through this..but I promise it will get better and I am with you always!! <3

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  4. Wow, that was intense and so awesome!! Keep it up!!

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  5. Intense and good imagery :) Needs a little editing on some of the wording - but otherwise, really draws the reader in!

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  6. Very intense and immediate. Did you mean gazing out the window rather than grazing? Other than that - I liked this a lot.

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    1. Yup ..my apologies for that error ..rectified it now and thanks for honest review !!

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  7. A powerful first draft. Captures raw emotions beautifully.

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    1. Well I just wrote and posted it , gratitude extended !!

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  8. Beautifully written. Love the simplicity and the variety of emotions :)

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  9. Very nice, it needs a little editing. But it has some good emotion and conveys well across the page.

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    1. Thanks a lot and it's just i haven't taking any poetry classes or course ...

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  10. Very moving and controlled. I am so sorry to see that this is a true experience. You are in my thoughts..xx

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    1. thnks and it's always better today than yday !! xoxo

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  11. too good ...you're awesome with words.

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  12. Very heartfelt words. Thank you for sharing:)

    Michelle

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  13. Your writing is very bold and courageous; I'm sorry about the muse for this sort of poem, but glad to know that you choose to be defined by who you are - your writing comes from what is inside - and not by a sad and horrible act you had no control over. I do hope you publish some day - you have the ability to help others.

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  14. Powerful, moving, and beautifully written. I really enjoy reading your work.

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