Gazing out my window
Didn't know
And then it hit me out cold
Reminiscing your pretense on bike ,
Conjuring up memories of your physique
Then ascertaining it with dark figure of man
Only to find it true
(Memories)
My breathing stopped , hopes lost
Pain racing up my veins
My unheard voice begging him to stop
Too fazed by shock and fear
Couldn't figure out a way to save me
A very close shave with death
Thus Falling off
The last straw was me on floor covered with tears , lies , injuries
Darkness encompassing all of them
Gazing out my window Didn't know
And then it hit me out cold
It was you ,ravager
Back to now ,
My hands trembled and lip quivered
And work before me seemed an eternity away
Tried to lay back and went to sleep for reparation
Next thing I know is Dad waking me up
Telling me it's time back for chores
Blinking and shielding my eyes away from light
Couldn't pinpoint the discrepancy between nightmare and reality
(Memories)
For the abuser held me so strongly in his roots
Bruises encased my arm and face
For on that night ,it dawned on my soul
I had lost the battle
Lost the world I created
Lost my integrity and true self
All at hands of egotist
Gazing out my window
Didn't know
And then it hit me out cold
It was you ,ravager
this is quite intense. it full of imagery as well. i hope this isn't based on actual events...
ReplyDeleteAo Bibliohile I totaly agree very intense, and after reading comments on fb, im very sorry to hear it was based on true events.But you seem really good with words and hopefully puttings down in amazing poems like this will help a great deal. xx
ReplyDeleteThanks and its better now than yday when it all happened and I am honored to get such compliments from you !!
DeleteWow, very emotional.
ReplyDelete-Adrienne
Thnks !!
Deleteits beautiful and so so well explained!!! and emotional too!! I am sorry sweetheart you had to go through this..but I promise it will get better and I am with you always!! <3
ReplyDeleteWow, that was intense and so awesome!! Keep it up!!
ReplyDeleteIntense and good imagery :) Needs a little editing on some of the wording - but otherwise, really draws the reader in!
ReplyDeleteVery intense and immediate. Did you mean gazing out the window rather than grazing? Other than that - I liked this a lot.
ReplyDeleteYup ..my apologies for that error ..rectified it now and thanks for honest review !!
DeleteA powerful first draft. Captures raw emotions beautifully.
ReplyDeleteWell I just wrote and posted it , gratitude extended !!
DeleteBeautifully written. Love the simplicity and the variety of emotions :)
ReplyDeleteThanks dear !! :))
DeleteVery nice, it needs a little editing. But it has some good emotion and conveys well across the page.
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot and it's just i haven't taking any poetry classes or course ...
DeleteVery moving and controlled. I am so sorry to see that this is a true experience. You are in my thoughts..xx
ReplyDeletethnks and it's always better today than yday !! xoxo
Deletetoo good ...you're awesome with words.
ReplyDeleteVery heartfelt words. Thank you for sharing:)
ReplyDeleteMichelle
Very powerful
ReplyDeleteYour writing is very bold and courageous; I'm sorry about the muse for this sort of poem, but glad to know that you choose to be defined by who you are - your writing comes from what is inside - and not by a sad and horrible act you had no control over. I do hope you publish some day - you have the ability to help others.
ReplyDeleteLike it!
ReplyDeletePowerful, moving, and beautifully written. I really enjoy reading your work.
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